Boo Radley and his Neighbors
An essay on Boo and his property
By Emmanuel Perry
8th grade English
Pine Point School
October 5th, 2010
(TS) Have you ever seen people loitering or looking at you from their yard? (SD)How do you feel about that? (CM) Do you feel uneasy or afraid? (CM) What would you do in that situation? (CS) Keep that in mind as I talk about this man named Boo Radley and his sneaky neighbors.
(T)Boo Radley is a legend in Maycomb County. (SD) They believe he killed his father and now lives alone. (CM) They also say he looks like a monster and eats raw animals.(CM) With the information so far, he does seem to be the kind of person you’d love to see in a dark alley, right? (SD) There is also a rascally band of friends, who sneak around his house trying to find out more about Boo Radley. (CM) These kids quietly sneak onto his property and try to see inside his windows. (CM) One time they even tried to give him a note on a fishing pole.(SD) I think that they should leave this man alone. (CM)If he wanted to be seen he would be outside, am I not correct?(SD) On the other hand, they seem like they just want to see Boo Radley and maybe even talk to him. (CM) I understand, however, that these kids just want to say hello. (CM) I Think I would probably do the same. (CS) Eventually, however, they should just leave him be. (T)In conclusion, I hope you have understood Mr. Radley’s point of view. (SD) In addition, I hope I explained the kid’s reasons, too. (CM)So next time you see people on your yard or driveway, think about what they may be thinking. (CM)Maybe you should go outside and say hello. (CS)You might just make some new friends!
Self Assessment
1. Writing those Things at the beginning of each chunk.
2.The first few sentences worked fine.
3. some spelling errors.
Emanuel this body paragraph is fabulous. I loved how you blended all of youre words and stayed on subject. I also found a few problems. In the sentance, "if he wanted to be seen he would be outside, am i not correct." If i were you i would,"put on one hand" to start the sentance because in the next sentrance you right on the other hand.
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