essay 6

     Secrets    

An Essay on Untold Back Stories

By Emmanuel Perry

                                        Pine Point School

October 25,2010

   (IS) Is your parent a good hunter? Was he or she a Hydraulics engineer? (CM) It turns out that there is always something about your parents you didn’t know. (CM) It may not be the coolest thing ever, but it is still something new that you’ve learned. (SD) Sometimes you need to be in a certain situation like Jem and Scout and a dog named Tim Johnson.

     (TS) Jem and Scout used to think that their dad was just another lawyer who stood up for black people until one day when they wandered into the woods and found something a little unnerving. (SD) When they got to the clearing at the end of the path they found old Tim, a good-sized dog, lumbering menacingly toward them and drooling excessively. (CM) When they told this to Calpurnia, she quickly set out to warn the whole town! (CM) “Nothing is more dangerous than a deserted, waiting street…” is how Scout describes the town, awaiting the dog like the plagues of Egypt. (SD) The sheriff was on the scene along with Atticus and the kids looking out the window. (CM) They had just cornered Tim onto the front lawn of the Radley’s home, and the sheriff gave Atticus the shotgun. (CM) What happened next was obvious; “ the rifle cracked. Tim Johnson leaped, flopped over and crumpled on the sidewalk...He didn’t know what hit him.”(CS) Jem and Scout were amazed as they realized their dad was more than just a boring lawyer; he was the legend “One-Shot Finch”!

     

(IS) I used to think my dad was cool but now he is even cooler. (SD) When I was wrestling with him one day I grabbed his shoulders and felt something. (CM) I asked him why he had those bumps and after a short interrogation, (CM) I found out something pretty fascinating. (SD) My dad used to work on hydraulic systems in chemical plants and malls. (CM) Hydraulic systems spray water when smoke or fire is detected. (CM) He said the bumps were from years of carrying pipes and other heavy equipment. (CM) He was certified in four states and worked on the Crystal Mall! (SD) This discovery was pretty interesting to me. (CS) I wonder what other things I may find out about my dad! 

     (SD) Parents may seem like boring, taller, older people who go to work and play on their iPads©. (CM) They seem very flat at first glance, but if you spend time with them, they will become much deeper than last time. (SD) All you have to do is ask them, like I did, or just find out like Jem and Scout. (CS) In conclusion, the best way to learn is to discover things yourself.

essay 6 outline

Outline for essay #6

Thesis: Parents are full of mystery

Bell word: surprise, discovery

Opening Paragraph

                        Hooker:  has parent been crack shot? Journeyman in 3 states?

                                    Comm.: There is always something secret about your parents

                                    Comm.: just when you think you know everything about your parents,they reveal something new

                                    Comm: sometimes they need a situation to remind them of these things or to share them

                                    Thesis with Bell word:  unknown,

            Body Paragraph

                        Thesis: One-shot finch

                                    Echo words:

                        SD: What happened?

                                    CM: this situation brought up something that Atticus didn’t want his children to know

                                    CM: dog was mad, Atticus shot it

                                    CM: people mumbled about it, kids amazed

                                                Q:  expertness, talent

                        SD: Jem and scouts reactions

                                    CM: amazed, curios to find more

                                    CM:

                                                Q: intrigued, inquisitive

            Body Paragraph

              Thesis: my dad was a pipe

                                    Echo words:  interrogation,

                        SD: how did  I find out?

                                    CM: dad had lumps on his shoulder I asked , he said he set up sprinkler systems

                                    CM:  found out when wrestling with him

                                    CM: 

                        SD: What did he do to get bump?

                                    CM:  worked in stores and factory building and chemical plants

                                    CM: fixed systems to squirt water when smoke was detected

                                    CM: Massachusetts, Vermont, Rhode Island, Connecticut he worked

            Ending Paragraph

              Hooker:  parents aren’t as they seem…

                                    Comm.:  the more time you spend with them, the more you will learn about them

                                    Comm.: Go ask your parents learn something new

                                    Thesis with Bell word: discover,

  

free writing

The writers block

by: Emmanuel

Ever had a writer’s block?

A writer’s cramp?

The great wall of anti-creativeness?

Well I’ve got it

I’ve got it bad!

  I can’t think of anything!

Should I write about ninjas?

A mystery?

Nature?

I want to fall on my back and cry “ ARRRRRGH!”

Wait a minuet

Hold the mayo!

I’ve got it

 I’ve got the idea1

I’ll write about having a writer’s block

Oh, I just did, didn’t I?

crying essay

Crying

An Essay on an Important Emotion

By Emmanuel Perry

Pine Point School

October 12,2010

            Crying- boy does it have a lot of variations! It shows happiness, sadness, and anger. It also shows pain. Crying when in pain is considered showing weakness among many people. I personally used to cry a lot and I’ve realized that it does not mean weakness. In fact, it sometimes helps those who cry.

        (T)  In TKAM 9 (To Kill a Mockingbird), Scout and Jem found this tree with a little hollow inside that had something new in it every day. (SD)When they decided that no one owned the items in the tree, they decided to take the things in the hollow, keeping them all to themselves, telling no one about what they found. (CM)As time went on, they found two soap hoodoo dolls carved to look like them. (SD)Scout seemed to recognize them as hoodoo dolls, which probably works like a voodoo doll; you do something to the doll and the real person will feel it. (CM)As the story progresses, Scout realizes that Jem has been crying, hiding his tears. (CM)They also had some intense itches for the same reason; the hoodoo dolls! It makes sense that that would be why Jem was crying. (CS) His doll probably got punctured by a needle or got squeezed. In conclusion, I believe Jem was crying not because of the tree being cement filled, but the fact that he was in pain.

(T) Many men and some women often say that crying shows weakness.(SD) To me, crying is a little more complicated than that. (CM) Crying is often linked with being sad. However, it is also used when angry, happy, or emotionally confused. (CM)Some people cry when a loved one dies because they are sad. (CM) In addition, you may cry when someone breaks your favorite possession because you are angry with that person.(CM) It does not show weakness at all. It's just used when in a very stressing time.(SD) Interestingly enough, crying also does something for a person. (CM) When you cry, it usually gets any sadness out of the way or extinguishes a building anger. (CM)It also makes people ask you what is wrong and may even comfort you in your hard times. (SD)  When I was little, I had a hard time doing my math, and my mom tried to help me. (CM) It was going ok until I got confused (again…) and my mom couldn’t help me understand why my answer was wrong. (CM)We got into a heated argument and she finally stopped giving help.(CM) I was so frustrated that I cried in my room. After crying, I felt refreshed and went back downstairs to finish my homework.

     (T)So, in conclusion, you now know my opinion on crying and why it is used. (CM)Jem used it for pain since he was pricked by it. (CM)I used it because I was confused and frustrated. (SD)Have you ever cried? (CM) How did it feel when you were done?  (CM)Did it help you at all? (SD)Finally, it is ok to cry; it doesn’t show how weak you are.(CM) It shows how you feel inside. (CM)What matters are the feelings inside.(CM) Not what people say.(CS) So feel free to cry today if necessary.

self assesment

1. I am working on making ssure the chunks go together.

2. I do better when the writing is about me and my opinion.

3. When I don't do all the paragraphs in order, the paragraphs don't go well together or make sense.

boo Radley Essay

Boo Radley and his Neighbors

An essay on Boo and his property

By Emmanuel Perry

8^th grade English

Pine Point School

October 5^th, 2010

       (TS) Have you ever seen people loitering or looking at you from their yard? (SD)How do you feel about that? (CM) Do you feel uneasy or afraid? (CM) What would you do in that situation? (CS) Keep that in mind as I talk about this man named Boo Radley and his sneaky neighbors.

    (T)Boo Radley is a legend in Maycomb County. (SD) They believe he killed his father and now lives alone. (CM) They also say he looks like a monster and eats raw animals.(CM) With the information so far, he does seem to be the kind of person you’d love to see in a dark alley, right? (SD) There is also a rascally band of friends, who sneak around his house trying to find out more about Boo Radley.  (CM) These kids quietly sneak onto his property and try to see inside his windows. (CM) One time they even tried to give him a note on a fishing pole.(SD) I think that they should leave this man alone. (CM)If he wanted to be seen he would be outside, am I not correct?(SD) On the other hand, they seem like they just want to see Boo Radley and maybe even talk to him. (CM) I understand, however, that these kids just want to say hello. (CM) I Think I would probably do the same. (CS) Eventually, however, they should just leave him be.   
       (T)In conclusion, I hope you have understood Mr. Radley’s point of view. (SD) In addition, I hope I explained the kid’s reasons, too. (CM)So next time you see people on your yard or driveway, think about what they may be thinking. (CM)Maybe you should go outside and say hello. (CS)You might just make some new friends!

            

Self Assessment

1. Writing those Things at the beginning of each chunk.

2.The first few sentences worked fine.

3. some spelling errors.

metaphor Essay

I Am The Ant

An exciting Metaphoric paragraph

An essay by Emmanuel Perry

8^th grade

Pine Point School

October 4, 2010

       Have you ever wondered what kind of animal you would be. Or, not only an animal, but maybe an inanimate object like a rock or a tree. It seems so easy to compare someone to something else. What about comparing yourself with something else? I wondered that same question myself. I believe I have found something that is about as unique and proud as I am…

It is hard to describe myself, but I would probably be an ant. The ant may be not the strongest of insects, but it still works hard. I am not the most physically fit; I can barely do 10 push-ups! But I work hard in everything I do. Ants also have an adventurous spirit. They go fearlessly into the unknown in search of food or a new house for their colony. I myself have some adventure inside me. I love to go places I've never been before, see things I never knew existed, or meet new people. Ants are also very social creatures, very much like me. They work together, even without an appointed leader. When something needs to be done in a group, I try to make sure we all get a fair share of work so no one gets into a fight. Speaking of fighting, have you ever picked up an ant? They would probably start biting you, right? That is somewhat like me, when I get 'picked' on; I sometimes go on the offensive. You have to learn when to apply force; otherwise you may not get many friends in life.

In conclusion, I believe I have all the characteristics of an ant: adventurous, defensive, hard working, social, and a sugar lover! I have other traits that are not like ants, but that's what makes me unique. And I am proud to be me!

Self assessment

1. To have the beginning and ending paragraphs go together with the body paragraph.
2. The strong point is I have my own flair to this essay.
3. When I have to write the intro/ending paragraphs after I write the body paragraph , they don't seem to go together well. This could be helped if I do this all at the same time.
4. I would give myself a B.