english #1
Emmanuel Perry
9/15/10
My Feelings On Summer
An Essay on my favorite SeasonMy feelings on summer ending could be best described by the song "So long Sweet Summer".
The Phrase, 'I stumbled upon you and basked in your rays' could relate to how I enjoyed being outside under the sun. During the summer I went all over the US and an island called Bimini. Most of the places were, in fact, really sunny. "I fell into you but now you are falling away'. This relates to how I got so comfortable, then suddenly school came out of the blue. When school came around, the line 'so long sweet slumber' relates to how I got less sleep in school than in summer. 'it's cold were your going, I hope that your hearts always warm' means how winter comes after fall. It also explains that summer will always welcome me next year.
I will really miss summer, and I can't wait for it next year. Even though I'll miss it, I'll do my best in school. :]
Self Assessment: one problem i have is making words go together that sound ok but are not written that way. One strong point in my essay was that i related to the song a lot and those made good sense. on my down side ( :[ ) i think i need to work on my essays length so it is 11 sentences long.
Awesome work E! I Like how you worked to compare the lyrics to how you feel! "This relates to how I got so comfortable, then suddenly school came out of the blue." This is an awesome sentence because I feel the same way too. Great Work [:
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