Monday, November 22, 2010

lonesome

Deserted
An Essay on Loneliness
By Emmanuel Perry
8th grade, Pine Point School
November 22, 2010

(TS)Have you ever been alone? (CM)Was it because no one seemed to care about you? (CM)It could be because no one you knew was there, and you felt companionless in a sea of strangers. (SD)Here’s an even more challenging question to respond to: why is being lonely considered bad? (CM)Sometimes we need the quiet, to get to know ourselves a little better. (CM)However, it can change a person, especially one who wasn’t alone by choice, in a bad way, leaving a near phobic fear of being abandoned again. (CS)Just like how Dill felt one summer night with Scout in To Kill a Mockingbird’…

(SD) One night Scout, and her friend, Dill, had a conversation about why he left his home some 3,000 miles away. (CM) Dill explained how unwanted he felt, like a broken toaster in the dusty attic. (CM) “ That wasn’t it he- they just wasn’t interested in me” was Dill's response to the question. (CM) He also mentioned that when he requested his dad’s aid to build a boat with him,a boat that could go on water, his dad ignored him. They never started the project, even a year later. (SD) Not only did his parents not want to do anything with Dill, they also did not talk with him! (CM) Dill explained that they purchased all he ever wanted –toys, books, and maybe some candy, even! (CM) “ You’re not a boy. Boys go out and play baseball with other boys, they don’t hang around the house worrying their folks” is what his dad said whenever Dill hung around the house too long.

(SD) Sometimes I felt forlorn when I had to go to an adult only party. (CM) Usually my parents said that there would be some kids there when it turns out they’re all at home playing games and eating pizza. (CM) So I went there thinking that it would be an all age party. (CM) Discouragingly, the party consisted of people over 30! (SD) Another thing that added to my discomfort, especially when I was little, was that grown ups talk about different things. (CM) For example, I might want to talk about something I learned at school or an experience at a theme park I’ve been to. (CM)They didn’t seem interested in what I was saying unless they asked me about it first. (CM) So I walked away, feeling dejected, to my table and drank the last of a soda. (SD) As I got older, things changed. (CM) I learned that it is best to talk about the other person's likes first and to be polite. (CM) I have started to laugh at adults’ jokes as well as being more interested in their conversations. (CM) Now I am no longer feeling forsaken at these parties.

(SD)You can prevent someone from being lonesome if you engage in conversations with him or her, specifically something they like, or do an activity together. (CM)You may make a new friend by doing so. (CM)No one wants to be friendless; having no one to comfort you in hard times, no one to cheer you up in good times, either for that matter! (SD)It really puts me in a hot pot when people are sad and alone. (CM)I hope one day the world will learn to acknowledge others for who they are and show more respect

Self Assessment

1.) One problem I am working on is that my essay agrees with my outline

2.) One thing in this essay that was really good was the bell words. I worked really hard to find them

3.) Sometimes my essay gets a little off track when I want to cram in another idea into it when I am working on my closing paragraph

Tuesday, November 16, 2010

Outline #8

Main point: feeling lonely isn’t good.

Bell: isolated, alone, friendless, forgotten

Par 1: lonliness

SD: have you ever felt lonely?

CM: why is it bad?

CM: were you bored?

SD: it seems like humans aren’t for lonely

CM: we are social creatures

CM: what if your parents didn’t love you?

Par 2: why is dill lonely?

SD: he felt no one wanted to interact with him

CM: they either were gone or reading in locked room

Q: “that wasn’t it he-they just wasn’t interested in me”- Dill

CM: they never completed boat dad promised

SD: the parents didn’t want to talk with him

CM: new parents want him to do something by himself or not with them- toys, books, baseball

CM: they do better without him

Q: “ youre not a boy. Boys go out and play baseball with other boys, they don’t hang around the house worryin’ their folks

Par 3

SD: I feel lonely sometimes

CM: friends aren’t at school

CM: go to a dinner meant for adults

SD: how d I cope?

CM: my sister help

CM: I bring a book or something

CM: I know that jesus is always there

Par 4

SD: you have seen how important it is to be loved

CM: fact babies would not live if had little care and attention

CM: make sure no one else is lonely

Thursday, November 4, 2010

growing up 1

GROWING UP

An Essay on Age

by Emmanuel Perry

Pine Point School

November 4, 2010

Have you ever wondered what growing up really means? To me, it means changing how you act and how you think. You also may have changed without trying,just like Jem did in To Kill a Mockingbird. He started to get irritated easier and didn’t always want to play with his sister, Scout. In addition, he also preferred to have his baths in private and would lock others out of the bath room until he was done. I have had some changes, too! One thing I noticed about myself two years ago was that I had a fear of the dark. It was pretty serious! I could not go to my room without someone with me. As I got older, I got more confident and brave. I believed whatever was there in the darkness I could handle. Now, however, I know nothing is there but thinking I could handle it made me a more confident person. I believe growing up may seem like something you don’t want. I mean, who ever wanted to be old? Even so, aging is a great way to learn and change the way you act and think.

Wednesday, November 3, 2010